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I want to tell her the things
I'll tell her when she’s older,
but the information terrifies her.

In order of importance:
she has luna moths in her head,
monarch butterflies in her stomach,
and a feral fetus in her womb.

Her hands
are collapse-clasped and folded
in her lap;
she holds her elbows like wings
away from her ribs,
ready to flap,
to flutter,
to fly.

I want to tell her
to keep one hand in her purse
so she can always find her keys,
to keep an eye on the door
and the door always open
so she can run if she doesn't feel safe,
but her cheeks are rorschach-splotch red
and the tension in her shoulders
warns me she's not ready
to hear this.

And there is the possibility that
maybe I’m not ready to tell
this fourteen-year-old
now woman,

I’m just as devastated as her;
that she is surrounded by friends and family
who are violated by a community
where no man can say yes all men.
Another collaboration with the great TwilightPoetess. We started with some positive material but when it came to me to write the introductory lines, the poem took a dark but phenomenal turn on a topic that is always in need of being discussed. We aimed for some important subject matter to talk about (rape culture).

In the poem, if it isn't clear, the narrator is wanting to help and comfort her and she is actively pushing these things away because of her trauma. It is what happens, unfortunately I know. But that's what me and TwilightPoetess were hoping for, was to show that it devastates her on a horrendous level to the point that people around her are violated.

This piece is somewhat of a personal experience to me, I've written about it before here: when I was in a psych unit in my youth a girl in a therapy session had a breakdown and told the story of how she was lured by a man into being raped. And I just couldn't react, it's a hard thing to explain being so angry that someone was violated in such a way and knowing that that person was still walking the streets even though he had been identified as her rapist. It was a horrible thing to hear, and after the group therapy session was over I was so tense from anger and disbelief and shock I had to be talked into moving.  People don't understand that when someone is violated, everybody around them becomes violated in some way too.


Give her version some attention:

Things I would Tell Her--C.I want to tell her things
I'll tell her when she’s older,
but the information terrifies her.
In order of importance:
she has luna moths in her head,
monarch butterflies in her stomach,
and a feral fetus in her womb.
Her hands
are collapse-clasped and folded
in her lap;
she holds her elbows like wings
away from her ribs,
ready to flap,
to flutter,
to fly.
I want to tell her
to keep one hand in her purse
so she can always find her keys,
to keep an eye on the door
and the door always open
so she can run if she doesn't feel safe,
but her cheeks are rorschach-splotch red
and the tension in her shoulders
warns me she's not ready
to hear this.
And there is the possibility that
maybe I’m not ready to tell
this fourteen-year-old
now woman,
I’m just as devastated as her;
that she is surrounded by friends and family
who are violated by a community
where no man can say yes all men.


As TwilightPoetess said, "This is a rather deep and touchy subject; I'd appreciate it if you all keep any drama out of the comments. If you're going to comment or argue or whatever, don't ATTACK people with your words please. Keep it cool, okay? Heart"
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Reads like a punch in the gut. I love your poem, but I wish that the utter travesty behind it never happened. 
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   General Artist
ALL THE FEELS AGFSHGSHGFA :heart: :heart: :heart:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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StormBringer23 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
Yeah, I've read, and reread, unsure of how to appreciate it. Though I do, I can't say why.

Because I just can't.

I grew up with a borrowed Mother, who always warned us, last thing out the door; If in doubt, run. I'm still here because of her.

Thanks you two.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you are. :) Thank you.
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014   Writer
This is beautiful. :heart:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you think so. :heart:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
:tighthug:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfect, both of you.
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