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Slam Poem in need of critique...apple bottom, beluga, big, bingo wings, blimp, blubbernugget, butterball, buffalo, cankled, chubby, chubble butt, chunky, double chin, doughboy, droptank, DUFF, elephant, fatabetic, fatso, fatsquatch, frump, FUPA, gamel, gothapotamous, gunt, heifer, hippo, hog, hoss, jiggleboo, joggernaut, King Kong, lard-tard, load, love handles...When I want to strip out of my own skinI remember that a childhood friendwill stuff money in my pants to watch me do so.And it isn't hard to think that he will actually do thisbecause how is he supposed to comparepastry dough to pantyhose when he is a manwho reads me as a book of his he doesn't want to finishbecause it's far too entertaining to watch my eyes squirmwhen he is unfamiliar with my body languagebut is content with Google translatemispronunciating every word from my mouthand dialect gestured from my bodyas he says soberly and with every intent to insult,“Show us your tits, man.”…This frien
An End, Once and For AllIThis is me listening for a ghostwith wildfire-wide eyes on a Tuesday at two a.m.spiking eagerness with anxious osmosis;I petition for an identity from a circuit court.IIThis is me listening for the ghost of Ariana Nicole David,who existed solely in the womb and pride of my mother.Mom says, with renewed vigorous rigor mortis,she wanted Ariana enough for her to existwithout ultrasound proof.Nicholas Aaron Swaner was born on April 17th, 1993without a father's signature or surname;Nicholas was born with a father's doubt.There is a letter to write to Nicholas' fatherand his father still hasn't written it yet.There is someone listening for the ghost of Nicholas Aaron Swanerbut only tasting spirits.IIII'm not an addict, but I got a habitof writing shit down when I believe itso I've started signing papers different.I won't write off my identity with a name.
Anagram for a Grandparentinfant cooing in haigadoes a parent raiseadult and not child?a child taught agesto adulthood prenatalbecomes parental.
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