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Echoral

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Echo… drip, ink trickled photo that—
—-That photo trickled ink, drip… echo.

Rip… crinkle… I felt the premise of presence— the
The— presence of premise, the felt I… crinkle… rip

The flicker and friends in the photos' memories…
… Memories' photos the 'in' friends and flicker the

Person that befriended and fringed upon enem… Me?
Me… upon fringed and befriended that person

Twice left, left twice.

Echoes of… who he isn't anymore—
Anymore isn't he who… of echoes

Twice left, left twice.

What inkwells cannot capture… echoes.
A continuation of one of my 6 word stories: [link]

I continued with the theme of the first line and "echoed" the previous line, as they are shown in couplets. As some of you may know, I take my punctuation seriously, and it should show here.

But overall, this poem was depressing to write. It is about the departure of my dear friend Eddie, not by death, but by depression. Me and him share a lot of things in common, such as being diagnosed with High Functioning Autism, or Aspergers.

Eddie currently serves his time in residential, and it is a constant reminder of my struggle with depression.

The title is a combination of the words "echo" and "choral."

No words to know this time....

Written by Nic Swaner, to claim otherwise is plagiarism.
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SnowmenLikeToWrite's avatar
This is so playful and sort of deceptive in it's narrative conceit, the way you twist expectation with wordplay and format, quite beautiful and even visceral, I had a very physical response to this, I suppose claustrophobia or agoraphobia, not sure which, but I felt pressed upon by some elemental fixation, echoes perhaps?

Lovely. :highfive: