Hopefully, a final revision. I am very, very happy with this version and what it shows going on in the mind of a bully. You can hear me perform it here: [link]EDIT 5/22/2013:
This was a painful poem to return to, but I have never been satisfied with how it originally turned out, and soon after I revisited it with *MattVoscinar
, it became tuned up, but was definitely not concise or consistent throughout. This is my most expressive poem to date, and successively my most personal. I don't think people get told straight up that they are bullying and intimidating those around them and those close to them, but I was fortunate enough to be told this, and in a way that it got through. Upon learning that my family was afraid of me, that my brother was weight training because of this fear, I had to reevaluate myself, who I was, and who I was being to others in mid-2012. I don't know if anything I've learned has stuck, or if every situation will require me to approach it as I have for the past year (almost). It's hard to change with Aspergers, Epilepsy, and a slew of mental disorders that are relatively mild, but I appreciate change for what it can accomplish.
As for critique, feel free to tear this poem apart if you still feel there is something wrong with it.Original Text:
This was painful to write. Yes, I do consider myself a bully and a horrible person. Sometimes the only thing that lets me know I'm still sane is that I'm aware of this aspect of myself and am actively trying to improve who I am in terms of how I treat others.
If you do not get the point of this poem, think about the two things I state that I believe and how I as one person, contradict them in the end. Not only have I intimidated people before, but even I recognize how ridiculous my perspective is at times.
This is no longer relevant because of how the poem has been changed.
Nic Swaner 10/18/2012
Revised 10/27/2012 with help from *MattVoscinar
Revised 5/22/2013 with help from *glossolalias
Revised 5/23/2013 by myselfBully
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